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University life for me
The merry-go-round of University life is something that one never forgets. It is a fascinating, fantastic, fabulous experience.
It’s a hundred percent true. Who can forget the day when he turns from an applicant who has passed entrance exams into a first-year student? That’s great!
Everyone tries hard to be, or at least to look, diligent, smart and enthusiastic. First tests and examination session. The first successes and first failures. Can you forget that? I can’t.
I am a 5-year part-time student now and I’m not so diligent, not so smart and not so enthusiastic as when I was a first-year student. Studying at University has changed people and it’s changed me.
It is a fabulous experience with great parties and meeting different kind of people but also it is a hard work: lectures, seminars and tutorials, a real avalanche of homework, assignments, written reproductions, compositions, synopses and papers. Works handed in and handed out. It’s a very hard and difficult work, don’t you think so?
I’m study at faculty of philology. Special disciplines so as history of Russian and foreign literature, psychology, ancient languages, Russian language and other give students knowledge on different problems.
So I think the studying at the university is a great step to a grown life. Having ended the university and becoming highly skilled experts we shall define the future of the native land, the our future and the future of the children and in a new 21 century on which revival of our country is necessary, blossoming of our faces, our abilities, our talent.
Не могли бы вы просмотреть небольшое сочинение на наличие ошибок (особенно волнуют грамматика и стилистические ляпы)? Желательно с объяснениями...
University life for me
The merry-go-round of University life is something that one never forgets. It is a fascinating, fantastic, fabulous experience.
It’s a hundred percent true. Who can forget the day when he turns from an applicant who has passed entrance exams into a first-year student? That’s great!
Everyone tries hard to be, or at least to look, diligent, smart and enthusiastic. First tests and examination session. The first successes and first failures. Can you forget that? I can’t.
I am a 5-year part-time student now and I’m not so diligent, not so smart and not so enthusiastic as when I was a first-year student. Studying at University has changed people and it’s changed me.
It is a fabulous experience with great parties and meeting different kind of people but also it is a hard work: lectures, seminars and tutorials, a real avalanche of homework, assignments, written reproductions, compositions, synopses and papers. Works handed in and handed out. It’s a very hard and difficult work, don’t you think so?
I’m study at faculty of philology. Special disciplines so as history of Russian and foreign literature, psychology, ancient languages, Russian language and other give students knowledge on different problems.
So I think the studying at the university is a great step to a grown life. Having ended the university and becoming highly skilled experts we shall define the future of the native land, the our future and the future of the children and in a new 21 century on which revival of our country is necessary, blossoming of our faces, our abilities, our talent.
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25.05.2009 в 16:26I’m study at faculty of philology.
глупая ошибка, найдите сами
So I think
thestudying at the university is a great step to a grown life. по-моему, следует убратьtheour future однозначно убратьЧто-то последнее предложение трудно воспринимается. Попробуйте его перестроить немного.
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25.05.2009 в 18:26sosuch asknowledge on different problems - я б заменила например на in different spheres of life
ended the university - тут наверное лучше graduated
Having ended the university and becoming highly skilled experts we shall define the future of the native land, the our future and the future of the children and in a new 21 century on which revival of our country is necessary, blossoming of our faces, our abilities, our talent. много оборотов и причастий, сложно воспринимается
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26.05.2009 в 02:56я бы one на a person заменила бы. Слишком грубо.
fabulous experience.
Прям-таки и fabulous ? Менее помпезное прилагательное бы выбрали.
Everyone tries hard to be, or at least to look, diligent
Запятые не нужны
The first successes and first failures
а)successes - помнится мне, на заре цивилизации оно было неисчисляемым
б)Почему в первом случае определенный артикль есть, а во втором отсутствует? Они что, различны? Уж определитесь.
It is a fabulous experience
Дежа-вю.
experience with great parties and meeting different kind of people
а) а как первая часть про parties связана со второй про meeting ?
б) meeting different kind of people - встречая разный вид людей?
I am a 5-year part-time student
наверное fifth, а не five?
but also
Должен предшествовать оборот Not only
written reproductions,
письменные размножения? Это как?
I’m study
Ааааааа!!!!!
Special disciplines so as history
...such as...
knowledge on
OF
knowledge on different problems - я б заменила например на in different spheres of life
солидарна
So I think the studying
Ну, либо без артикля, либо на that исправьте
to a grown life.
в выращенную жизнь? Может, adult?
Having ended the university
Having graduated from...
Having ended the university and becoming highly skilled experts we shall define the future of the native land, the our future and the future of the children and in a new 21 century on which revival of our country is necessary, blossoming of our faces, our abilities, our talent. много оборотов и причастий, сложно воспринимаетс
солидарна. Составьте на основе conditionals. И вам и читателям вздохнется.
И проще!
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26.05.2009 в 17:03-
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22.11.2009 в 20:52"experience with great parties and meeting different kind of people
б) meeting different kind of people - встречая разный вид людей?"
Лучше бы просто написать, что девушка забыла поставить "with"
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12.02.2016 в 18:59