Сколько бездну ни корми, она все равно в тебя смотрит.
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About me
MoreI’m Veronika. I’m nineteen-year-old student of philological faculty of Tomsk State University. I’m fond of studying: I like literature and languages and I want to show and develop my abilities and intellect. I write in prose and I want to be good at it. I like learning something new, that I have never known and can’t ever imagine. I like changing my viewpoint.
I’m interested in strange and mystical things. I like sweets, green tea, apples and sandwiches. I like gathering cones and mushrooms and climbing up trees. I like painting and I go to art classes. Also I like music, especially classic organ music and rock, both russian and english. I don’t play any musical instruments, but I would like to learn how to play play violin and piano, because I think I have a good ear for music. And sometimes I like singing, when no one listens, because I think I'm in a bad voice. I’m not a sportsman, but I like swimming, skiing and playing chess although it turns out not very good.
I’m lean tall youthful girl with oval face, short rumpled brown hair and uneven fringe on high forehead. My eyes are usually grey, sometimes green. I don’t wear make-up.
I’m not very sociable, very timid and secretive, introverted dark horse, not self-confident, but clever and talented in fact. I’m curious and versatile. I’m an active and spirited workaholic, although sometimes I can be lazy and apathetic. I’m gentle and considerate, strong-willed and reserved. I’m distracted, unpractical, naive and childlike. I’m day-dreamer and night owl.
My family
MoreI have a little family: father, mother and a cat.
My father is a tall man with short blond rumpled hair and small bald spot. He has blue eyes and little moustaches. Some of his acquaintances think that our features resemble. Usually he is dressed not very tidy and sometimes looks even older, them he is. He works in the library of TSU as engineer and he is a workaholic. He is good sportsman: he can play football, valley-ball, chess, checkers and something else, he swims and skis very good. He has a lot of different amazing efficiencies. He is an egghead; he is versatile, but inconsiderate, cynical and sometimes rude. He is pragmatic and down-to-earth. He is overbearing, but not very self-confident. He is good mixer and has great sense of humor.
My mother is a lean tall woman with short dyed blond hair and pale face with a lot of make up and because of that she looks younger then she is. Her eyes are sometimes grey, sometimes blue. Some her friends mix up us on the phone. She has economic education, but now she is a housewife and distributer of cosmetics. She loves cats and dogs and afraid of mice. She is soft-hearted, careful and pitiful. She is argumentative and bossy, wick-willed and catty. She is killjoy for me and good-company for her friends. She is religious and bigoted.
The cat is the most charming member of our family. She has downy hair, snow-white with big blue-gray spots, and big expressive green eyes. She is so lovely, but not very clever. Her main characteristic is laziness. She is a sponger, but she can catch a mouse. She is curious and cheeky.
I have grandmother, uncle and two cousins from mother’s side. I see them quite seldom, because our relations are not very good. And I have a lot of remote kinsman from father’s side – I even don’t know them all.
The house of my dream
MoreI dream to live in a castle in the air, that flies on a big white cloud and is built from white stone. It has light halls and passages with French windows, and ramshackle spiral staircases, secret rooms and other dark corners, in which hide ghosts. High towers are girding with balconies. In the castle there is a big library with comfortable rocking-chair near the fire-place and table with tea and cakes, books in this library appear from any corner of the world, if I want to read them. In the kitchen of the castle there are a lot of fruits and sweets. And there is cozy study with all that I need for working and learning. There is high writing-table, at that I can work upright. On the table there is my notebook. Also in the study there is an easel and a stand with a heap of different pencils of various solidity and brushes and pens of various sizes, water-colors and gouaches, and a lot of paper of high quality. There is a crystal globe that can show me every corner of the world. On the floor of the study there is a soft carpet with traceries. The ceiling of the study is a reflection of the sky, so in the day-time a chandelier of the study is the sun and in the nigh-time it is moon and stars.
Around the castle there is a garden that divides among four seasons: a part of autumn where the wind carries wet motley leafs, a part of winter with rowan-trees in snow and mist, a part of spring with blooming bird cherry trees, a part of summer with heavy showers and thunderstorms. There is the pool under the open sky.
In this castle it is always warm and clean. It can quickly move and fly near the earth or higher then clouds.
About me
MoreI’m Veronika. I’m nineteen-year-old student of philological faculty of Tomsk State University. I’m fond of studying: I like literature and languages and I want to show and develop my abilities and intellect. I write in prose and I want to be good at it. I like learning something new, that I have never known and can’t ever imagine. I like changing my viewpoint.
I’m interested in strange and mystical things. I like sweets, green tea, apples and sandwiches. I like gathering cones and mushrooms and climbing up trees. I like painting and I go to art classes. Also I like music, especially classic organ music and rock, both russian and english. I don’t play any musical instruments, but I would like to learn how to play play violin and piano, because I think I have a good ear for music. And sometimes I like singing, when no one listens, because I think I'm in a bad voice. I’m not a sportsman, but I like swimming, skiing and playing chess although it turns out not very good.
I’m lean tall youthful girl with oval face, short rumpled brown hair and uneven fringe on high forehead. My eyes are usually grey, sometimes green. I don’t wear make-up.
I’m not very sociable, very timid and secretive, introverted dark horse, not self-confident, but clever and talented in fact. I’m curious and versatile. I’m an active and spirited workaholic, although sometimes I can be lazy and apathetic. I’m gentle and considerate, strong-willed and reserved. I’m distracted, unpractical, naive and childlike. I’m day-dreamer and night owl.
My family
MoreI have a little family: father, mother and a cat.
My father is a tall man with short blond rumpled hair and small bald spot. He has blue eyes and little moustaches. Some of his acquaintances think that our features resemble. Usually he is dressed not very tidy and sometimes looks even older, them he is. He works in the library of TSU as engineer and he is a workaholic. He is good sportsman: he can play football, valley-ball, chess, checkers and something else, he swims and skis very good. He has a lot of different amazing efficiencies. He is an egghead; he is versatile, but inconsiderate, cynical and sometimes rude. He is pragmatic and down-to-earth. He is overbearing, but not very self-confident. He is good mixer and has great sense of humor.
My mother is a lean tall woman with short dyed blond hair and pale face with a lot of make up and because of that she looks younger then she is. Her eyes are sometimes grey, sometimes blue. Some her friends mix up us on the phone. She has economic education, but now she is a housewife and distributer of cosmetics. She loves cats and dogs and afraid of mice. She is soft-hearted, careful and pitiful. She is argumentative and bossy, wick-willed and catty. She is killjoy for me and good-company for her friends. She is religious and bigoted.
The cat is the most charming member of our family. She has downy hair, snow-white with big blue-gray spots, and big expressive green eyes. She is so lovely, but not very clever. Her main characteristic is laziness. She is a sponger, but she can catch a mouse. She is curious and cheeky.
I have grandmother, uncle and two cousins from mother’s side. I see them quite seldom, because our relations are not very good. And I have a lot of remote kinsman from father’s side – I even don’t know them all.
The house of my dream
MoreI dream to live in a castle in the air, that flies on a big white cloud and is built from white stone. It has light halls and passages with French windows, and ramshackle spiral staircases, secret rooms and other dark corners, in which hide ghosts. High towers are girding with balconies. In the castle there is a big library with comfortable rocking-chair near the fire-place and table with tea and cakes, books in this library appear from any corner of the world, if I want to read them. In the kitchen of the castle there are a lot of fruits and sweets. And there is cozy study with all that I need for working and learning. There is high writing-table, at that I can work upright. On the table there is my notebook. Also in the study there is an easel and a stand with a heap of different pencils of various solidity and brushes and pens of various sizes, water-colors and gouaches, and a lot of paper of high quality. There is a crystal globe that can show me every corner of the world. On the floor of the study there is a soft carpet with traceries. The ceiling of the study is a reflection of the sky, so in the day-time a chandelier of the study is the sun and in the nigh-time it is moon and stars.
Around the castle there is a garden that divides among four seasons: a part of autumn where the wind carries wet motley leafs, a part of winter with rowan-trees in snow and mist, a part of spring with blooming bird cherry trees, a part of summer with heavy showers and thunderstorms. There is the pool under the open sky.
In this castle it is always warm and clean. It can quickly move and fly near the earth or higher then clouds.
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20.12.2009 в 18:10nineteen-year-old student. в таких приложениях всегда убирают множественное число
I’m found of learning
I'm fond of studying тогда уж. learning требует дополнения за собой
adore literature and languages
слово adore дословно означает "умиляться", напиши I like literature или I'm interested in...
I want to show develop my abilities and intellect
во-первых development (of), во-вторых, сама фраза звучит очень коряво, предлагаю заменить чем-нибудь show.
I write prose and I want to do it well
I write in prose
I want to do it well заменить на I want to be good at it
I never now and can’t ever imagine
know
I've never come across before
I could have never imagined
если я продолжу править ваш текст, я напишу вам еще 1000 ошибок, потому что вы видите - у вас их в каждом предложении очень много. прочитайте ваше творение еще раз и попробуйте поправить тексты сами, потом выложите - хотя бы в ворд скиньте, он вам спеллинг поправит
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21.12.2009 в 12:37I like to change my mind.
не знала, что сознание продаеццо в сменных дискетках О_____________О
это во-первых) лучше напишите opinion, viewpoint
во-вторых, love и like лучше употреблять с инговым инфинитивом. to будет использоваться в основном с условным наклонением типа I'd like to go for a walk. но I like walking
I’m interested in some strange and mystical things
some убрать, оно тут не нужно, или заменить на any kind of (всевозможные)
I like to gather cones
аналогично с like
I’m learning in Art School
во-первых, studying. learning не употребляется с дополнением места действия. во-вторых, in an art school, а лучше всего сказать I go to art classes или I do art classes (но этот вариант наименее желателен, потому что это американщина...)
especially classic organ music and russian and english rock
and and and and. убрать) especially classic organ music, as well as russian and english rock. или можно еще посимпатичнее, например especially classic organ music and rock, both russian and english.
I’m not playing any musical instruments
это вы используете продолженное время, иностранец бы вам, если бы вы этот текст рассказывали, сказал бы так: ну да, очевидно, что вы сейчас не играете на инструменте, ведь вы сейчас говорите. I don't play, I can't play
but I would like to learn how to play play violin and piano
have a good ear for music
I'm in [I have] a bad voice
not vary good
О____________________О вот тут я окончательно убита.
very
I’m a lean, tall, youthful girl with oval face
oval face убрать
I’m wearing no make-up
I don't usually wear make-up
не используйте вы продолженное время, оно означает действия в данный конкретный момент или дикое возмущение каким-то постоянным действием типа He's always cheating!
I’m not vary sociableI’m not vary sociable, vary timid and secretive
трижды убили. для человека, который в общем-то неплохо сочинил такие текстищи не уметь писать слово very это омг О____О
but clever and talented in fact
добавьте что ли as I think. а то после not self-confident вот это звучит забавно)
I’m active and spirited, workaholic
запятую убрать и написать так I'm an active and spirite workaholic
вообще последний абзац я бы разнообразила немного, а то ну что это I'm blah-blah-blah. I'm blah-blah-blah и так пять предложений подряд. Пишите I'm blah-blah, some people find me blah-blah, but I still think I seem pretty blah-blah-blah, although sometimes being blah-blah-blah.
это по первому тексту. Сейчас возьмусь за второй
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21.12.2009 в 17:51трижды убили
Ну, извините =) *Убрала из второго текста ещё несколько покушений*
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21.12.2009 в 21:08a little family which consists of my father, mother and a cat.
and little moustaches
слово little чаще означает маленький по возрасту. small, tiny
them he is.
than he is
He works in the library of TSU
можно просто in TSU's library
аббревиатуру лучше расшифровать
as engineer
as an engineer
He is good sportsman
he is good at sports
he is a good sportsman
valley-ball
хоть бы глянули в словаре как пишеццо
volleyball от слова volley (удар с лета)
and something else
other games
some other games
He has a lot of different amazing efficiencies
He's got a variety of amazing...
He is an egghead; he is versatile, but inconsiderate, cynical and sometimes rude. He is pragmatic and down-to-earth. He is overbearing, but not very self-confident. He is good mixer and has great sense of humor.
во-первых, то же самое что я говорила об абзаце "о себе", во-вторых, не знала, что Ваш отец - михер)). замените слово в зависимости от того, что имели ввиду
with a lot of make up
she wears a great deal of make-up
and because of that she looks younger then she is
due to that she looks younger than she is
слово then означает "тогда"
Some her friends mix up us on the phone
Some of her friends mix us up on the phone
или some friends of hers mix us up on the phone
She has economic education
she has a higher degree in economy
but now she is a housewife and distributer of cosmetics
в начале поставили артикль, а во втором почему забыли? a distributer или she distributes cosmetics.
She is soft-hearted, careful and pitiful. She is argumentative and bossy, wick-willed and catty. She is killjoy for me and good-company for her friends. She is religious and bigoted.
аналогично с моим замечанием про абзац о своих качествах и качествах вашего отца.
She has downy hair, snow-white with big blue-gray spots
she has downy snow-white hair with blue and gray spots
I have grandmother
a grandmother
an uncle
I even don’t know them all.
don't even know all of them
извините, третий текст не осилила
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