Снова редактирование текста и проверка грамматики.

[Pineta]

На этот раз тут совсем чуть-чуть.Просто я правда не знаю как это написать.
Мне нужно было написать письмо в молодежный журнал.
Письмо от имени подростка.
Значит для этого нужно использовать informal English,так как врят ли подросток будет писать такими фразами как pay attention to,etc.
А именно таких слов/выражений,которые colloquial я оказывается знаю не так много и все свои мысли ими выразить не могу.
Подредактируйте кто знает что можно заменить.
И грамматику,если видите ошибки,а то у меня с этим проблемы.

Заранее спасибо!

текст письма:
Dear Kate!
I get into a relationship in two years, but recently my boyfriend spent all his spare time with a new friend. They drink beer, gossip about girls, and walk the whole nights. My guy report to him on every (his or own?) step, he is ready to see a friend in any moment even when we had planned to spend the evening together. He slide towards a bottom under the friend’s influence (his friend doesn’t study, doesn’t work and he won’t say no to a drug). My boyfriend was an ideal earlier, but he is irresponsible and rude now, he lost old friends. He was always on terms with his parents and there is no a day without bickering now.
I love him and I need to pull him back. But how can I do it?

Comments

[krys]

I get into a relationship in two years - Не совсем понял, что тут имеется в виду, но если у нее эти отношения УЖЕ длятся 2 года, время нужно поменять, складывается впечатление, что у нее будут отношения через два года. А если разговорный, то лучше просто "Me and my boyfriend have been together for 2 years but recently..."

but recently my boyfriend spent all his spare time with a new friend - лучше has been spending, поскольку напргает ее, в частности, и то, что ситуация длится и никуда не девается.

My guy report to him on every (his or own?) step, - reports и his every step.

he is ready to see a this friend

in at moment

He slide towards a bottom - если хочется именно поиграть с опусканием, то я бы использовал he's going down.

under the his или this friend’s influence (his friend doesn’t study, doesn’t work and he won’t say no to a drug) - последнее в смысле "не откажется принять дозу"?

he lost his old friends

noT a day

bickering разговорной речи не очень свойственно, если этого слова не было, например, в словаре этого урока, имхО, лучше что-нибудь попроще, типа not a day without a fight (самый распространенный вариант), или quarrel или clash. Хотя bickering звучит красиво -)

[Pineta]

Krystal,спасибо!

[Гость]

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[Гость]

Пожалуйста помогите.как правильно?I stopped to smoking six months ago, and I feel much healthier now. или I stopped to smokе six months ago, and I feel much healthier now.

[Гость]

ну плииз оч прошу

[krys]

Гость
I stopped to smoke - я остановился, чтобы покурить.
-ing c to не употребляется, вам нужно I stopped smoking six months ago... А лучше - I quit smoking.