[Pineta]

проверьте,пожалуйста правильность грамматики.
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..Grace why are you so heartless?Laura is a nice and a kind woman. She really would like to help you and to be your guardian. She have already have two atoptive children, but she decided to adopt a one more child. You are lucky that she chose you.

- Ann, stop your waffle! I don't want to hear out the nonsense. I am not a good and it's not a shop that she can have the most successful purchase. Why do you think she want to take me?
I'm sure because of excellent marks. Yes, my gratified vanity is elated, but I don't love her.

- My darling, you don't love her, because you don't know her well.
Gracy, my dear, of course, you are my companian in bondage, but I can't encourage you. We are outcasts here, you kow it and that's why I would be glad if you will have family and friends. You are my bosom friend and I can't imagine that...

- Sh! Somebody is here...

Grace opened the door and saw Alice. Grace fell upon the girl and began to shout

-Damn pebble, what are you doing here? Do you think to eavesdrop on and to tease?
Grace hited the girl on the cheek and ran away.
Poor Alice rubed the cheek with bewilderment because she didn't think to listen to ther talking. She was a kind girl, but then she decided to fight against Grace. So thus Grace got one more enemy in children's home. And even Ann left her because she was adoped.
Sometimes we are reasons of our sufferings. But Grace understood it too late.

Comments

[goddessnephele]

Что, на мой взгляд, неверно и бросается в глаза:
She have already have two atoptive children -> She already has two atoptive children
to adopt a one more child -> to adopt one more child
I am not a good -> I am not good
Why do you think she want to take me -> Why do you think she wants to take me
I would be glad if you will have family and friends -> I will be glad if you have a family and friends
Grace hited the girl -> hit - irregular verb (hit - hit - hit)
Poor Alice rubed the cheek -> Poor Alice rubbed the cheek
listen to ther talking -> listen to them talking или listen to their talk
she was adoped -> she was adopted
Sometimes we are reasons of our sufferings -> Sometimes we are the reason of our suffering

[Pineta]

goddessnephele,спасибо.сейчас посмотрю.